Ep 2, any suggestions? (1st page update)

All right, there's no art available, but my plan is:

1. Reaching 20.000 words (which will be the average of all eppisodes)
2. Outfit change, we really need to see Michelle in a dress.
3. Backstory
4. A new narrator, currently I'm naming her Grace.
5. More POV from Michelle
6 . Another demon to catch, of course! (This time it's a male)

Anything else you'd like to suggest? :3

Teaser:

Quote :

"Can you cut my hair?"
"What? But--"
"Just do it, will you!? I don't care, just cut it as short as you can!"
"Uhh, all right."

"............."

"It's such a shame. To see your long hair all over the floor."
"It doesn't matter, I have to be strong. This is my resolution."

azureXtwilight wrote:

All right, there's no art available, but my plan is:

1. Reaching 20.000 words (which will be the average of all eppisodes)
2. Outfit change, we really need to see Michelle in a dress.
3. Backstory
4. A new narrator, currently I'm naming her Grace.
5. More POV from Michelle
6 . Another demon to catch, of course! (This time it's a male)

Anything else you'd like to suggest? :3

More Michelle x Gerald? *gets shot*
And elaborate a bit more on the boxes and how they're related to the 7 sins.

That's backstory too, right? XD
And of course, more MXG~

azureXtwilight wrote:

That's backstory too, right? XD
And of course, more MXG~

So it's cannon?

As canon as you can say, yeah.

Eh, wait. Not as as canon as the usual.

azureXtwilight wrote:

As canon as you can say, yeah.

Eh, wait. Not as as canon as the usual.

Since Michelle's doesn't have a choice between several guys?
But I'm really surprised, I thought Miki was one of the main characters of the series, like the female protagonist but turns out it was Mike.

As in, not how other canon will end, I guess.
I really want to make a VN where other people's decision influences the outcome, not just the main character.

azureXtwilight wrote:

As in, not how other canon will end, I guess.
I really want to make a VN where other people's decision influences the outcome, not just the main character.

So they won't get a happy ending? Q-Q

Just wait and see, wait and see~

azureXtwilight wrote:

Just wait and see, wait and see~

I guess that's my only choice.
But I think those two deserve some measure of happiness, at the very least, since it seems they've been through a lot.
But seriously, I'm looking forward to your next episode.
........Also, am I the only one who thinks it might be interesting for Gerald to have a rival?

BAHAHAHA, NICE IDEA.
Wait, people could bash me for not letting that guy be a second option.

azureXtwilight wrote:

BAHAHAHA, NICE IDEA.
Wait, people could bash me for not letting that guy be a second option.

I guess that's true.
Well, that depends more on the character, if the character is someone who's just using Michelle then I don't think it's very likely for anyone to bash you.

Or someone that looks like this:



Jkjkjk, there can be a lot of reasons. That guy's a pervert, for example. Or swag.

azureXtwilight wrote:

Or someone that looks like this:

Jkjkjk, there can be a lot of reasons. That guy's a pervert, for example. Or swag.

Oh gods Azure, don't scare me like that XD
But it's really upto you.
I just think Michelle's a bit.....easy to manipulate because of her sheltered life, I guess.

I think this can be a battle between this kind of guy:



against this:



XDD

*and everyone will surely pick the first one, drat*

azureXtwilight wrote:

I think this can be a battle between this kind of guy:



against this:



XDD

*and everyone will surely pick the first one, drat*

XD I know those characters from Pumpkin Scissors.
And I would definitely chose the second one. Who's scarily similar to Gerald except for the sarcasm now that I think about it.
Even has a berserk mode like Gerald.

*is shamelessly basing gerald's scar and beserk mode to him, except that Gerald is sarcastic XD

You know, I was looking for love tropes in tvtropes for my latest VN, clicked huge guy tiny girl, clicked pumpkin scissors, and then see an amv about it. And I think, I'VE NEVER DONE A BIG GUY BEFORE~ So boom! Gerald.

azureXtwilight wrote:

*is shamelessly basing gerald's scar and beserk mode to him, except that Gerald is sarcastic XD

You know, I was looking for love tropes in tvtropes for my latest VN, clicked huge guy tiny girl, clicked pumpkin scissors, and then see an amv about it. And I think, I'VE NEVER DONE A BIG GUY BEFORE~ So boom! Gerald.

And I can't believe I didn't realise the similarities until you showed the pictures XD.
Michelle's similar to the main girl too,now that I think about it.

I try to make my original pairing, the main girl's not as bratty and spoiled as Michelle, even though they came from a rich family. And Mike's clearly showing her affections to Gerald explicitly, as you can see in the forums X3


.... And Michelle's flat.

azureXtwilight wrote:

I try to make my original pairing, the main girl's not as bratty and spoiled as Michelle, even though they came from a rich family. And Mike's clearly showing her affections to Gerald explicitly, as you can see in the forums X3


.... And Michelle's flat.

Lol this.
XD And it's kinda hard for that girl to be as bratty as Michelle since she's a soldier and probably not as sheltered as Michelle.
And I just meant that she has some similarities with Michelle.

Yeah, but I'll try to make a completely different story and people

This idea of yours can be for episode 3~ A mysterious challenger appears!
*shot

azureXtwilight wrote:

Yeah, but I'll try to make a completely different story and people

This idea of yours can be for episode 3~ A mysterious challenger appears!
*shot

XD That sounds interesting.
And is it possible for a demon to hide their presence from Gerald's radar?

Spoiler:

Oh my, then I guess you probably know what I thinking.
Are all the 7 demons evil?